From Me and You to We

In symmetry we Move
Together searching unknown
Deep places of our soul

Immovable and cold
Each thirsty, yet defiant
Reaching for our own mirage

Twisted unity, unbroken
Furtively bound by time
A tightly woven tapestry

Sharp, slicing clean
Wounds below the flesh
Cries muffled in fury

Weightless surrender
In shimmering display
Unfettered and free to be

dverse is exploring “lost in translation” . Choosing 1 of 3 poems, derive your own translation from the original.

This is new for me, and I am audacious enough to take a challenge.

Octavia Paz (1914-1998) – Another Spanish speaker and more recent Nobel prize winner. Born in Mexico, he was a political activist, ambassador and essayist so that much of his poetry reads like prose poems, “written within the perpetual motion and transparencies of the eternal present tense” **

Two Bodies 
Two bodies face to face
are at times two waves
and night is an ocean.

 Two bodies face to face
are at times two stones
and night a desert.

Two bodies face to face
are at times two roots
laced into night. 

Two bodies face to face
are at times two knives
and night strikes sparks.

Two bodies face to face
are two stars falling
in an empty sky.

About Mary (tqhousecat)

I am a wife and a mother of two grown children. I love Jesus and sharing my faith through written words. I currently have a poetry blog and also write on My main focus is hope in Christ. I only wish that whoever reads this will be blessed, inspired and occasionally amused.
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12 Responses to From Me and You to We

  1. lynn__ says:

    I like your “translation” here, Mary. You met the challenge!

    Liked by 1 person

  2. robtkistner says:

    “Unfettered and free to be”, would that we all know this feeling in our lives — wonderful poem Mary!

    Liked by 1 person

  3. thank you for being audacious – hope you enjoyed the challenge
    that opening verse is really excellent and sets the scene for the joys and difficulties two bodies face

    Liked by 1 person

  4. I love how you used all the aspects of a love story.

    Liked by 1 person

  5. rivrvlogr says:

    Nice. You’ve touched on elements of each of the original stanzas, and done so well.

    Liked by 1 person

  6. Beverly Crawford says:

    Ah yes, the goal … unfettered and free to be! Good write!

    Liked by 1 person

  7. pvcann says:

    tightly woven tapestry, love that image and indeed the whole of it.

    Liked by 1 person

  8. memadtwo says:

    I really like the line “reaching for our own mirage”–so true. (K)


  9. rothpoetry says:

    Your poem gives the feel of the lightness of being! Beautifully done!


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