As Seasons Change

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Capturing the beauty before it wilts
As we begin to say goodbye to Spring

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Are we paying close attention to its performance
Before it bows and we say goodbye to Spring

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Such a short scene tucked between the extremes
Soon we will say goodbye to Spring

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It comes late and leaves early
And too soon we must say goodbye to Spring

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I look in the mirror and wonder
Did I stop and ever say goodbye to Spring

 

dVersepoetspub.com. Trying out a Ghazal  and I made myself cry.

All nature photos are my own and the last is yahoo.com

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About Mary (tqhousecat)

I am a wife and a mother of two grown children. I love Jesus and sharing my faith through written words. I currently have a poetry blog and also write on medium.com. My main focus is hope in Christ. I only wish that whoever reads this will be blessed, inspired and occasionally amused.
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14 Responses to As Seasons Change

  1. hannamccown says:

    It’s beautiful Mary.

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  2. For me this doesn’t fulfill the requirements of the form..while you do use the ending words in the second line of the couplets, and you sign yourself with the first person pronoun, you haven’t gone into the idea of what spring means to you spiritually, emotionally, passionately.

    You miss the force and focus of the idea of the form. And there is usually a narrative; yet you don’t give us anything personal, you don’t really make it your own. You don’t tell us why spring is meaningful or memorable here. Poetry forces us to go deep, to expose ourselves to be vulnerable. Spring is about life, rebirth, resurrection, the surge of life, the forces that drive us. Nothing of that is really here.

    Think about it a bit. I think you are very capable of giving us a much stronger poem and I want you to try to do that. These are always learning opportunities at dVerse. We want you to be the best poet you can be! Thank you for linking. I know you can let this be a first draft of better ones to come!

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  3. Thank you! I appreciate this! know I wasn’t understanding the whole concept of the form. I so appreciate the critique. I will work on it more an offer another when it happens.

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  4. Grace says:

    Spring is just starting here and I hate to say goodbye so soon. But you are right, it leaves so soon and we don’t even have time to say goodbye.

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  5. Spring is such a short moment… this is wonderful theme and I would work it up to something excellent.

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  6. Thanks, I wonder how many drafts till “excellence” comes.

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  7. msjadeli says:

    I love the illustrations you put in your poem, Mary, especially the crocus one.

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  8. Yes, although it does to me suggest both love and loss, I guess it’s a bit gentle for a ghazal. However I enjoyed the combination of photos and poetry.

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  9. Likening the passage of our personal time to that of the seasons is quite apt I think. You did the form justice.

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