Staying Present

Dusk silences the world without a sound

Snowcapped houses blend with winter’s ground

Aromas from my kitchen bid me come

Lighted with the warmth of love I’ve found

 

Tomorrow like a thief comes uninvited

Spins my thoughts awhirl as love unrequited

I embrace this present darkness, not in want

Hidden treasures are waiting to be sighted

 

dVersepoetspub.com Prompt. Another rubyiat. This time with the (6) senses. Touch, hear, smell, see, taste and kinesthetic ( that which causes us to feel and sense motion). Feedback?

 

About Mary (tqhousecat)

I am a wife and a mother of two grown children. I love Jesus and sharing my faith through written words. I currently have a poetry blog and also write on medium.com. My main focus is hope in Christ. I only wish that whoever reads this will be blessed, inspired and occasionally amused.
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19 Responses to Staying Present

  1. Love this Mary. Just read in Oswald today how we are to listen when darkness comes, for He will speak.

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  2. Gina says:

    blended the sense nicely Mary, love “Tomorrow like a thief comes uninvited” – in this line all the feelings of safety hug tighter in the poem

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  3. Nan Mykel says:

    Reblogged this on NANMYKEL.COM and commented:
    Lovely.

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  4. jillys2016 says:

    This is wonderful, Mary! (And I see you are a reader of Chambers?) The allusions come through, but for the reader who doesn’t know them. they don’t distract – if that makes sense.
    One thing that tripped me up – the meter in your final line. The word ‘are’ throws the iamb off for me. I’ll offer a thought; trash or treasure:
    “Hidden treasures waiting for the sighted”

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  5. Thank you! And yes, I love Chambers! The last line sounds better without the “are”, but I was keeping with the 11 syllables.

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  6. V.J. Knutson says:

    “Dusk silences the world” – nice opening – and then I like how you have also started the next stanza. Well done.

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  7. Keeping up the rhythm is quite hard work. I thought the last line had a bit of a bump that none of the foregoing had? Just a humble opinion from one who doesn’t know anything. 🙂 It’s true how dusk can bring on silence.

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  8. Frank Hubeny says:

    The sixth and seventh lines both seem to have 6 accented syllables the way I read them. The other lines only had 5. This may be where the meter sounds off to some, but I imagine there is room for variation. One might be able to read “unrequited” without accenting “un”. I like the thought of embracing the present darkness “not in want”. in those lines. The content perhaps is what really counts.

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  9. This is wonderful now… love how you have managed to include so many senses in such a small poem

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