Staying Present

Dusk silences the world without a sound

Snowcapped houses blend with winter’s ground

Aromas from my kitchen bid me come

Lighted with the warmth of love I’ve found


Tomorrow like a thief comes uninvited

Spins my thoughts awhirl as love unrequited

I embrace this present darkness, not in want

Hidden treasures are waiting to be sighted Prompt. Another rubyiat. This time with the (6) senses. Touch, hear, smell, see, taste and kinesthetic ( that which causes us to feel and sense motion). Feedback?


About Mary (tqhousecat)

I am a wife and a mother of two grown children. I love Jesus and sharing my faith through written words. I currently have a poetry blog and also write on My main focus is hope in Christ. I only wish that whoever reads this will be blessed, inspired and occasionally amused.
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19 Responses to Staying Present

  1. Love this Mary. Just read in Oswald today how we are to listen when darkness comes, for He will speak.

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  2. Gina says:

    blended the sense nicely Mary, love “Tomorrow like a thief comes uninvited” – in this line all the feelings of safety hug tighter in the poem

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  3. Nan Mykel says:

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  4. jillys2016 says:

    This is wonderful, Mary! (And I see you are a reader of Chambers?) The allusions come through, but for the reader who doesn’t know them. they don’t distract – if that makes sense.
    One thing that tripped me up – the meter in your final line. The word ‘are’ throws the iamb off for me. I’ll offer a thought; trash or treasure:
    “Hidden treasures waiting for the sighted”


  5. Thank you! And yes, I love Chambers! The last line sounds better without the “are”, but I was keeping with the 11 syllables.


  6. V.J. Knutson says:

    “Dusk silences the world” – nice opening – and then I like how you have also started the next stanza. Well done.

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  7. Keeping up the rhythm is quite hard work. I thought the last line had a bit of a bump that none of the foregoing had? Just a humble opinion from one who doesn’t know anything. 🙂 It’s true how dusk can bring on silence.

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  8. Frank Hubeny says:

    The sixth and seventh lines both seem to have 6 accented syllables the way I read them. The other lines only had 5. This may be where the meter sounds off to some, but I imagine there is room for variation. One might be able to read “unrequited” without accenting “un”. I like the thought of embracing the present darkness “not in want”. in those lines. The content perhaps is what really counts.

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  9. This is wonderful now… love how you have managed to include so many senses in such a small poem

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