There WAS a TIME the LINES in POEMS did RHYME
i LEARNED nurSERY rhymes IN iAMbic RHYTHM
But AS my LIFE beCAME more UNdeFINED
MiMICKing ENDings SEEMED to JUST cause SCHISMS
Then it WAS I LET my WORDS free TO make SENSE of ME
Today at dVerse Frank would like us to use iAMbic rhythm in a poem of our choice. I hope I did this correctly.
mehflowers 
Ahhh. You used the beat so well!
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Thank you for encouraging words!
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a most interesting lyrical piece
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I thought it interesting, yet I wasn’t sure if I was doing it right. I hate to just ignore a challenge.
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i am no authority on format but i read poetry for how it makes me feel, yours had a special sound to it. challenges like these do help us craft poetry out of our normal comfort zone and that’s why i like doing them, like you i can’s resist a challenge! the feedback we get is good for future writes too i believe.
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Ah… yes.. but once you do enjambment you can let the lines run free also in pentameter.
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There’s no need to rhyme. Blank verse also works. The meter depends on how those reciting the poem say the words. Some accent them differently than they would in normal speech. Even with normal speech, an iambic meter should sound somewhat odd, like a mist over a lake compared to normal speech. I liked this line: “But AS my LIFE beCAME more UNdeFINED”
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Ooh, a mist over a lake…subtlety, or perhaps a whisper. I have to learn more about this. I will practice.Thanks Frank. I am still new!
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Yes! The rhyme can be so stunting – artificial sometimes.
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This poem is just weird and hard to read!
Bill
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And that is why I never bought your book! Haha!
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Let the words come out freely. Honestly, I have a hard time with the beat too.
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Some lines worked better than others, this is no easy form! I really liked your title, Mary 🙂
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Thank you! The last line went flahooey! It was really hard!
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🙂
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