Round and Round

It seems the way the circle goes
My strength declines as I grow old
My footprints etched in other’s deep
Some may learn to dance to my life song

Some may learn to dance to my life song
My footprints etched in other’s deep
My strength declines as I grow old
It seems the way the circle goes

(Alternate reversal – the rules state the lines can be flexible)

Better still
One raise the volume to my life song
And color my footprints etched in other’s deep
My strength declines as I grow old
It seems the way the circle goes

 

 

dVersepoetspub.com prompt today is reversal poetry. I will wait for feedback to see if I did it correctly. It was tricky. I have done something like this before, I think.

About Mary (tqhousecat)

I am a wife and a mother of two grown children. I love Jesus and sharing my faith through written words. I currently have a poetry blog and also write on medium.com. My main focus is hope in Christ. I only wish that whoever reads this will be blessed, inspired and occasionally amused.
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11 Responses to Round and Round

  1. Frank Hubeny says:

    I especially liked the first two lines (as well as the last two 🙂 ). Nice sound and this form seems perfect for the idea of going round and round.

    Liked by 1 person

  2. rothpoetry says:

    So very nice… the circle of life in the footsteps of others!

    Like

  3. V.J. Knutson says:

    Boy can I relate: “My strength declines as I grow old.” The reversal works, but I wonder if you could shift something to gain new insight. Not sure what that would be – maybe even changing up the sentence order. I was hoping to find renewed strength or even someone walking in your footsteps in the ending. (Please tell me if I’ve overstepped my place – it’s the former teacher in me.
    I have to slap her wrist frequently.)

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  4. lynn__ says:

    I like the rhythm of this circle 🙂

    Like

  5. It does make a satisfying circle 🙂

    Like

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